Wednesday, March 7, 2012

Poetic Thought: Quiet as the grave

I wrote this poem  yesterday.I just couldn't help but to share it with you.I wrote the poem and felt like crying.Yeah,i really should be whipped because it's only a fragment of my imagination,but it felt so real even though it emanated from me and i knew it was my imagination.Anyway,enjoy and your comments are welcomed as usual.

Quiet As The Grave

In the dead of the night
Lonely as a dead crow
Jolted out of his sleep is a very frightened man
In his arms is the only thing that defines love
The only one that defines love
There's fear in his eyes
There's fear in his heart
Tears ran down his face
But got lost in the sweat that covered his entire body
In the still of the night came his greatest nightmare
The love of his life is in his arms
But this night she is cold as ice
On this quiet,lonely night
She is as quiet as the grave

32 comments:

  1. ok. imagination right? what were you thinking when you wrote this? seriously? its scary tho

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    1. Hahahaha Seriously,i really can't tell what i was thinking.I do know i wanted it to be scary tho!

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  2. I like it...but of all things???
    Pray tell what you were thinking of?

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    1. Hehehehe Can't even point out what i was thinking dear.It just came out the way it did.

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  3. One of our greatest fears is experiencing the end of someone, something, dreams that we love. And knowing that all is cold and there is nothing we can do.....

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    1. You don knack the nail for head.#gbam

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  4. Nice and sad.
    Why did you wanna cry naa? Its just a poem o, take it easy

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    1. I guess i wanted to cry cos i got in touch with my soft side,i don't like when that happens.LOL

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  5. its scary...Yes it is! its never easy to loose a loved one. nice poem.

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  6. Really sad. I guess you were subconsciously thinking of someone you love (we all do in the night, at least I do) and it spurred you to write this poem.

    I shudder in my spine to think of losing anyone close to me.

    Still, Is it weird that I love this poem even with all the sad aura around it?

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    1. It's possible i was subconsciously thinking of someone.I'm glad you love the poem tho.

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  7. That is scary. I can see how it makes you emotional. Makes me think of the lost souls :(

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  8. There is no doubt that you have talent in writing. Too bad that i did not get the meaning of some lines.

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    1. Thanks alot.However i'd be honored to explain the lines you didn't understand.

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  9. To me its more sad than scary.
    Losing a loved one is so sad,the finality of the loss sometimes makes it difficult to breathe.
    Sad.

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    1. The idea was for it to be scary though and i agree it's a sad poem.

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  10. Touching poem, you really do write well.

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    1. Thanks alot Myne.That coming from you is really an honor.

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  11. sad n poignant..
    aah the pain was so well reflected, no wonder u were feeling like crying after writing this !!

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    1. Yeah Jyoti,poignant describes it better.

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  12. Hmmm...
    The love of his life is in his arms, but this night she is cold as ice.

    *sad smile across my lips* this poem is so touching some part of me...Nice piece awesome,very well said.

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    1. Sorry about the thought that gave rise to the sad smile.However,i'm glad you like the poem though.Thanks!

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  13. Oh yeah this is really emotional! u write good!!

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  14. Nice poem but Erm bro,you ayt.??? Looks like you really wanna talk about something..

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    1. Hahahahaha I'm iight bro,but i really appreciate the concern.

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  15. hmmm this is really nice.
    Funny how I didn't immediately think you were writing about a lost love like everyone else but the realization that you didn't have the "love" in the first place.
    Hope I'm not being too deep... I really really like though!

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    1. Nah,you're not being too deep.Thanks alot!

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  16. Sometimes, i sit and think of what it'll feel like to lose someone i love, cry my heart out like a mumu then carry on with life as if na me be badt guys. To lose someone is bad enough, to have them die in your arms is an experience no one will ever forget.

    May the Lord be our strength in times of sorrow

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  17. AMEN!!! Me i pray never to experience such o!

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